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Series Summary:
Primary Story Codes: MFff MFf MF Mf ped inc anal creampie mother/daughter father/daughter
Brent is a divorced father of a thirteen-year old girl. He meets a mother and her young
daughter at a secluded campsite, where a pair of the girl's dirty panties sets
off a process that leads Brent to a new relationship with his daughter.
Chapter List:
Chapter 0: Author's Introduction intro nosex Chase Shivers introduces the reader to the series and issues standard
cautions about the series content.
Chapter 1: The Scent of a Lily MF ped inc creampie mother/daughter Brent explains the first spark in the process that
sent him into a realm of sexual activities he never knew he would enjoy.
It all starts at a secluded camp site with a pair of dirty panties belonging
to a young girl.
Chapter 2: Sipping Nectar MF ped inc creampie mother/daughter Brent is drawn deeper into Dahlia's conflicting
relationship with her daughter. First the girl's soiled panties, then a late-night
confession that brings thoughts of his own daughter to his mind.
Chapter 3: Waterfalls MF gsolo ped inc creampie mother/daughter The second day at camp brings new
questions and confessions as Brent learns more about Dahlia and Lily, and
opens up about his own fantasies involving his thirteen-year old daughter.
Chapter 4: Make Her Leave MFg ped inc oral creampie mother/daughter Lily's shocking display of sexuality leaves a confusing mix
of arousal and shame in Brent's mind. In the camper, he is faced with a
difficult decision to make love to Dahlia in front of the girl, or to run.
Chapter 5: The Scent of an Orchid Msolo masturbation voyeurism inc father/daughter Brent returns home confused and horrified by the weekend
with Dahlia and Lily. An unexpected phone call sends him to Seattle to deal
with a situation endangering his daughter, Orchid.
Chapter 6: Drastic Measures Msolo masturbation voyeurism inc father/daughter The situation with Orchid's mother takes a desperate turn,
and the swirling emotions in Brent's mind become even more cloudy when he
realizes what he must do to take care of his daughter.
Chapter 7: Once More Unto the Breach MF inc mother/daughter father/daughter creampie Brent's concerns for his own mindset around
Orchid coming to stay sends him on a crazy mission to talk to Dahlia and
see if he can overcome his attraction to his daughter. He has no idea how
badly his plan will backfire.
Chapter 8: Pollination MFg gsolo ped anal atm masturbation creampie inc mother/daughter Brent reaches the pivotal moment in his relationship with
Dahlia, and with Lily, and has a crucial decision to make that will affect his
future relationship with his daughter Orchid.
Chapter 9: Always Yours MFg ped oral creampie inc mother/daughter Brent accepts his place in the life of Dahlia and Lily. His
dreams are full of images from the night before, and often, his daughter Orchid
is the one he sees and feels against him. A morning of making love to
Lily becomes a fantasy of spilling his seed into his own daughter.
Chapter 10: Bouquet of Orchids Msolo masturbation inc father/daughter Orchid's arrival brings a welcome break from the girl's situation
in Seattle. As he plays the good day all day, Brent realizes that his
daughter's dirty panties would be available in the hamper every day.
Chapter 11: Routine MF Msolo masturbation phonesex voyeurism inc father/daughter
mother/daughter Brent and Orchid become more comfortable with their
new living arrangements, and a routine emerges, including Brent's easy
access to Orchid's soiled panties.
Chapter 12: Rough Ride and Honesty MF creampie inc mother/daughter Brent takes Orchid camping for the
first time. Dahlia and Lily are there, a surprise to everyone that they'd
be spending the weekend together. Brent and Dahlia share a spontaneous and
rough fuck that leaves them both breathless and wanting more.
Chapter 13: The Sweetest Thing MF Mg ped oral masturbation creampie inc
mother/daughter father/daughter Saturday brings new opportunities for Brent to spend time with Dahlia,
Lily, and Orchid. The tension mounts as Lily calls Brent 'Daddy' again, and
he embraces it during a moment alone with the girl.
Chapter 14: Saxual Padding MF Msolo fsolo ped inc mother/daughter father/daughter
masturbation creampie voyeurism exhibitionism Orchid becomes interested in learning
to play the saxophone after learning Lily plays. Brent hears his daughter
masturbating for the first time, and Lily and Dahlia come for a weekend visit.
Chapter 15: Role Play and Risk MF creampie inc father/daughter role play After the first evening visiting, Dahlia
role plays as Orchid and lets Brent imagine fucking his own daughter.
She later reveals her secret desire to become pregnant.
Chapter 16: What Makes Us Excited MFg ped oral inc mother/daughter Lily offers Brent a wakeup surprise. Brent
and Orchid share a candid discussion about attraction. Lily's hands roam
in a dark theater.
Chapter 17: Do Stuff MF anal creampie ws inc mother/daughter father/daughter Dahlia is horny to be bred by Brent. They
share a moment in the bathroom then have an intense time in the bedroom
with their daughters' panties. Orchid and Brent have an honest discussion.
Chapter 18: One-Point-Five Mill MF Fg Msolo ped masturbation creampie inc
mother/daughter father/daughter Brent and Dahlia compare notes and learn that
Orchid had not gone too far with Lily. A surprise at work leaves Brent's future
up in the air with many possibilities. The weekend arrives and the campsite
welcomes them once more.
Chapter 19: That Last Step MFg ped anal atm rim creampie inc
mother/daughter While Orchid hikes with Freddie and Ben,
Lily joins Brent and Dahlia to try something new. What happens during Orchid's
hike sends everyone into crisis mode.
Chapter 20: Lily's Slow Ride Mg MFg ped creampie inc mother/daughter Orchid comes home after her accident. Dahlia
and Lily stay the day and help get her settled back in. Lily offers her body
in a gentle way to Brent, and the slow, sensual afternoon leaves him feeling
much closer to the nine-year old than ever before.
Chapter 21: Orchid's Petals Mf Msolo masturbation inc father/daughter Orchid's first day of recovery brings
father and daughter to a special moment shared in the bathroom.
Chapter 22: The Talk Mf Msolo masturbation inc father/daughter All the secrets that Brent has hidden from
Orchid bubble out as his daughter tries to understand Lily.
Chapter 23: About Incest MF creampie inc mother/daughter father/daughter Following Brent's confession, Orchid
works through her emotions which swirl around the understanding that
her father had sex with Lily. Dahlia and her daughter arrive and the four
have a talk about incest before Brent and Dahlia retire and try to
make a baby.
Chapter 24: In Public MF oral creampie exhibitionism voyeurism Brent and Dahlia finally have a real
first date together. Dahlia shows her blow job skills in the car, and
then they pull off for Brent to return the favor. Lunch, the art gallery,
a walk in the park all offer chances for arousal to build, and a late
evening nightcap leaves the couple totally in love.
Chapter 25: Fingers and Kitties Mf masturbation inc father/daughter After the girls spend Saturday together,
Dahlia and Brent get a teasing recap of what they did. After Dahlia and
Lily head home, Brent and Orchid share a first passionate moment together.
Chapter 26: Heavenly Mf MF oral masturbation inc father/daughter swallow The morning after the intimate
moments shared between father and daughter, Brent introduces Orchid
to oral sex.
Chapter 27: Pearl Necklace Mf masturbation inc father/daughter Brent and Orchid continue their
intimate exploration of each other's body, sharing a slow morning cum,
then the next evening, enjoying watching each other masturbate.
Chapter 28: A Spring Faerie at a Picnic Mf Fsolo oral masturbation voyeurism inc father/daughter A day off of works prompts Brent and
Orchid to have a picnic at the park. The father and daughter enjoy an
exciting time in the trees and watch as a woman masturbates nearby.
Chapter 29: Slippery Mf Mfg ped creampie masturbation inc father/daughter The relationship between Brent and
his daughter grows, and though he wants to wait until Orchid's cast
is off, a new position has him cumming in her vagina without breaking
her hymen. A trip to Dahlia's has Orchid watching while Lily rides her
father to orgasm.
Chapter 30: While She Eats Your Daughter MFfg ped inc creampie masturbation oral swallow mother/daughter
father/daughter Dahlia joins Brent and the girls for the
first group experience as a foursome.
Chapter 31: Magical Bouquet MFfg ped inc creampie mother/daughter
father/daughter Brent, Dahlia, and the girls take a day
trip to a mountain park where Brent proposes to Dahlia. The four enjoy
a sensual, loving moment in a beautiful location.
Chapter 32: Rationalizing Mf oral swallow masturbation inc father/daughter Brent and Orchid head for home when the
takeover of Brent's employer begins immediately. On the way, Brent has to
pull off the road when his daughter's fingers find his cock.
Chapter 33: Limits MF cheat voyeurism Brent's final day of work brings to an
end one of the most difficult weeks of his life. An incident with his boss
leaves him on the edge of a breakdown.
Chapter 34: Urgency Mf oral swallow inc father/daughter Not following his own advice, Brent
almost moves too fast and for the wrong reasons to consume Orchid's virginity.
An afternoon with the pressure off brings the two back together in a new
position.
Chapter 35: Orchid's First Ride Mf f1st creampie inc father/daughter Brent and Orchid browse property listings
in the mountains and find a spot they want to visit. At the campground, after
a hot and humid first day, the cooler air of the following morning
yields the perfect moment for Orchid's first time.
Chapter 36: Breathtaking Mf MF creampie oral swallow inc father/daughter Brent and Orchid recover from their first time and feel
the urge to do it again. The next day, after a third time, they view a property that
catches their imagination. When Brent tells Dahlia about his first time with
Orchid, Dahlia is very turned on.
Chapter 37: Swapping Kisses MFfg MF anal ped creampie inc mother/daughter father/daughter After putting in an offer on the
mountain property, Brent, Dahlia, Orchid, and Lily enjoy an evening together
next to the creek at the campground.
Chapter 38: Backdoor to Nature MFfg ped anal atm creampie ws inc mother/daughter father/daughter The four campers head back to the utopian
natural property to enjoy a picnic, and before long, Orchid is enjoying
her father's exploration of her most private hole.
Chapter 39: Late Mfg Fsolo MF ped inc preg? voy creampie
father/daughter mother/daughter Brent awakens to Lily's tender touches and
they are soon joined by Orchid for a late morning encounter. Later,
Dahlia has some news which may change things.
Chapter 40: Opening and Closing MF Mf inc squirt creampie father/daughter Excitement is in the air as the closing on the
property draws nearer. Brent shares a morning with Dahlia and an evening
with Orchid.
Chapter 41: Getaway MFfg ped creampie oral swallow mother/daughter father/daughter The timing is right for the foursome to spend a week
away from the bustle of selling and building homes, leading them to a
clothing optional bed and breakfast in Key West.
Chapter 42: Maria MFFfg ped inc creampie ws father/daughter mother/daughter Brent, Dahlia, Orchid, and Lily find
their time in Key West thrilling, and when Brent discovers one of the young
employees at the guest house doing something taboo, it leads to a hot night
for everyone.
Chapter 43: Dribbling MF Mf Mg ped anal creampie ws voy father/daughter Brent and Orchid share a quick coupling
outside, then he shares a bathroom stall with Dahlia before an evening quicky
with Lily.
Chapter 44: Potent MFfg ped inc preg creampie oral swallow mother/daughter father/daughter The week in Key West flies by and the
foursome return to Virginia. Soon, Dahlia has a joyous surprise for Brent.
A phone call days later brings shocking news.
Chapter 45: A Date with Maria MF preg creampie Brent travels back to Key West and
talks frankly with Maria about what happens next. During his stay,
they bond and spend an unexpectedly romantic evening together.
Chapter 46: Deep Throat MF preg oral swallow deepthroat Brent continues to work things out with
Maria, and the more time he spends with her, the more he feels himself
caring deeply for the young woman.
Chapter 47: Give it a Try MF Mf MFfg ped preg inc creampie masturbation
oral facial father/daughter mother/daughter Brent returns home from his trip to
visit Maria. He shares private moments with Dahlia and with Orchid before he
and Lily join the others after a nap.
Chapter 48: The Perfect Ten MFfg ped preg anal inc creampie masturbation squirt toys
dildo mother/daughter father/daughter Brent arranges for Maria's stay in Virginia,
then heads to the campsite with the others to celebrate Lily's tenth
birthday.
Chapter 49: Personal Gifts MFF preg creampie Maria arrives in Virginia to stay with Brent
and the others for a week. Orchid and Dahlia offer special welcomes.
Chapter 50: Lily's Surprise MFF MFFfg ped anal creampie preg inc masturbation
toys dildo squirt mother/daughter father/daughter Maria's first full day staying with the
family is filled with pleasure moments. Lily has a surprise for Maria which
leads to a first for the nineteen-year old.
Chapter 51: Butterflies Mg ped creampie Brent and Dahlia go to the campsite
with the girls where the future of their relationships will begin to be
hashed out.
Chapter 52: Tight Back There MFf Mf anal preg creampie rim inc father/daughter Brent and Orchid talk about relationships,
then are joined by Maria for a passionate threesome outside. Later, Brent
and Orchid share a more intense experience.
Chapter 53: Transitioning Mg Mf ped inc creampie ws father/daughter Lily and Brent share a slow moment in the
middle of the night, then they all must adjust as
two pregnant women move through their terms.Brent and Orchid do so in an
unusual way.
Chapter 54: Lying and Last Night MFFfg ped inc preg creampie oral swallow
father/daughter mother/daughter Brent, Dahlia, and Maria discuss a difficult issue, then
the last night before moving is shared between the five of them.
Chapter 55: A New Beginning MFFfg ped inc creampie oral swallow
father/daughter mother/daughter The move-in day has finally arrived,
and the family gets a walkthrough of their new dream home.
Chapter 56: The Bitter Fluid Mf ws creampie oral swallow inc father/daughter While the others are away shopping, Brent and Orchid enjoy time together
while trying out a new kinky act.
Chapter 57: Two Things MF preg creampie Brent and Maria fly to Key West to meet with the nineteen-year old's
grandmother. A frank conversation follows, and the details are unsettling.
Chapter 58: Mangoes and the Hot Tub MF preg oral swallow Maria's grandmother visits from Virginia
to spend a week with her granddaughter and new family.
Chapter 59: Thankful Mg ped creampie Gramma's visit continues the next day, which
is Thanksgiving. A surprising confession is passed to Brent, and later he
slips away to spend intimate time with Lily.
Chapter 60: Not for Pity MF anal ass-to-pussy creampie After the family agrees to the idea, Brent
approaches the elder Maria with a proposition.
Chapter 61: One Taste Mf MFf anal preg creampie oral inc father/daughter When the elder Maria departs to return to
Key West, the younger Maria withdraws into sadness. Brent makes a phone call
to try to make contact with his ex-wife, Orchid's mother Malory.
Chapter 62: Ms. Rosa MFg preg Brent, Dahlia and the girls attend
Decemberfest before a middle-of-the-night phone call brings difficult news.
Chapter 63: In Our Hearts MFFfg ped anal creampie atm oral preg inc
mother/daughter father/daughter The final celebration of Gramma's life takes place
in Key West, then the five lovers return to their mountain home.
Chapter 64: All Grown Up Mf MF creampie inc father/daughter Orchid has a special request for her birthday,
and Dahlia shares her fantasies with Brent.
Chapter 65: Cropped MF preg spank masturbation Dahlia and Brent discover a new-opened
adult shop in town and buy a new toy to try out at home.
Chapter 66: Birthday Morning MFf MF creampie oral swallow masturbation
inc father/daughter Orchid turns fourteen, and Brent and
Maria wake her up with intimate touches.
Chapter 67: The Birthday Suit MFFfg ped creampie preg oral
inc mother/daughter father/daughter Orchid's birthday continues as she gives
the idea of a birthday suit a whole new definition.
Chapter 68: Watching MFFfg MF ped masturbation creampie preg
inc mother/daughter father/daughter Brent and Dahlia pick out a new SUV, and,
later, the family enjoys watching an adult film together.
Chapter 69: Before the Visitors Mfg ped inc creampie oral father/daughter The household prepares for the arrival of Dahlia's sister and two teen children.
Brent shares a final evening free with Orchid and Lily.
Chapter 70: A Little Off Mfg mf ped inc creampie oral voy father/daughter brother/sister Dahlia's sister Heather and her children, sixteen-year old Chime and
fifteen-year old Glade, arrive for the holiday break. Brent and Dahlia note
that something unspoken seems to be bothering all three.
Chapter 71: No More Hiding MF FF mf fg ped inc sisters brother/sister anal creampie oral voy exhib With the holiday approaching, a series of admissions leads Dahlia's
sister to open up about her life with her son and daughter.
Chapter 72: Escalating Quickly MFf inc mother/daughter creampie oral swallow Christmas day offers a new chance for
Brent to get to know Heather and Chime, and a phone call changes the day's
mood for Orchid.
Future Chapters - Coming Soon!
Comments on Flower Petals: (SPOILERS)
Author
Date
Comment
Chase's Response
tony
12 October 2017
just getting into the story and enjoying very much im sure others have said how well written it is
love the details as well as the overall structure which cant always be said for long stories
nice payoff at the end of each chapter which always comes in handy
that said im off to the next chapter
Thank you so much! I hope you continue to enjoy the series!
Yuri
17 May 2017
This series has been one of my favorites and I am so excited to see it continue
great work and pls keep them coming. I love the way in all your story's you make
it sound like having incest sex is like some kind of religious experience. I'm a big
fan plz writing more. I can't wait for the next chapters... Can't wait for the next
chapter of this amazing story. It'a sooo hot! And so loving! And so wonderful!
Thank you!!
Thank you so much, Yuri! More soon to come!
Anonymous
14 March 2017
Please hurry with the next chapter
Sorry, I was locked out of ASSTR for some months, but I'm able to get back in
now. I'll get new chapters up soon!
geoff
24 February 2017
I NEED Ch.71...your story has captured my thoughts, interest and more.
I love your characters and cannot wait for more.
Thanks, geoff! I have #71 written. I'll get it edited and published soon, I hope!
Jm
17 January 2017
Please hurry Thanks
I'll get new chapters up when I can. I did publish #69 and #70 a few days ago
on January 11, 2017. Hope you saw those!
Anonymous
13 January 2017
okay this one is a bit too set-up lol.
The story has been pretty good.. but this one lmao..
Orchid just talks to her dad about the possibility of wanting to
have sex with another man, and blah blah blah..
Suddenly in walks
a boy around her age, who is sleeping his sister for her to have sex with.
Erm... repeating yourself, I think. See response to your comment from January 11
below.
Anonymous
12 January 2017
"Incest is... complicating... isn't it?" (from Flower Petals, Chapter 69) It's a
pleasure that your stories take the time to explore those complications (and relationships)
in detail. Excellent stories. Thanks for writing and sharing them. I look forward to
each new chapter.
Thank you so much! I enjoy reading and writing stories which don't just fall together without
reflection and weighing concerns first. It makes the payoff that much more worthy of everyone's
time to me. One of my new series,
Emmy Grows Up doesn't do any of that, and it has a wholly different feel to it. It is
easier to write a story like Emmy, but not nearly as fulfilling as stories where the characters
think about and deal with complications. At least it is that way for me.
Anonymous
11 January 2017
(author's note: refers to chapter 70)
Really, could you have set that up any clearer..
Orchid is thinking of
having sex with another male, suddenly a 15 year old walks into their house who
is sexually active with his sister...
Sorry that one is just lol too set up
Umm... I guess I could see how that seems like an obvious 'set up' here, but don't get your
hopes up.
Also... if it was a set up, what's wrong with an obvious
set up in a fantasy fap story? How else would extremely unlikely events happen otherwise?
Not saying what you're assuming is going to happen, but if it did... so what? I mean...
All of it was an obvious set up. Bringing in Lily and her mother... Orchid... Maria... All
pretty obvious set ups. Sorry if this one looks too much so to you. Not sure what you
would rather I do than present foreshadowing ahead of events.
Anonymous
31 December 2016
You need an editor. Combine the chapters into fewer, change the
repetitions, maybe a few factual tweeks, and come up with a conclusion.
Then, your might put together a novel.
I'm not sure how to respond to this. Is this a compliment, that you think
the story is worth the effort to turn into a novel? Or, is this a mean
criticism about how poorly the story is done? I have no idea!
This story is open-ended. I'm not planning to draw it to a conclusion
any time soon. I'm also not looking to turn it into a novel beyond what
it already is.
Tampa Reader
11 December 2016
Your writing is so fresh, so erotic. Thanks for putting the time in to
entertain and enthrall us. Please continue with Maria's pregnancy going into
full bloom. I know you can describe sexual congress with an increasingly
pregnant woman. That will be so hot.
Thanks, Tampa Reader! I look forward to describing the ongoing pregnancies of Dahlia and
Maria in future chapters. I hope you enjoy what comes next!
Anonymous
3 December 2016
This country and the world is so hung up about the ideas fantasize here that
I have never heard of solutions. When I had improper ideas I used self control.
It was all I had available. But self control did not solve my emotional problem
and kept me from being the father I wanted to be. I regret that my step-daughter
did not have better parents. My problem has been solved by time. Fifty-two years
have left me limp but I do not feel that is a good solution for men below the
age impotence. I have only read through chapter 7. I hope some solutions are
found for Brent is found that does not leave him or anyone else a victim.
So sorry to hear that you have have struggled with difficult and dangerous
impulses, but I'm glad that you were able to control them. I always want readers to
understand the difference between the fantasies in my stories and the reality of what
happens to children when they are acted upon. The former is safe and gives an outlet
for desires you can't stop, but the latter is damaging and harmful. I really wish
adults would stop harming children and instead let fantasy be the only outlet.
I don't know what sort of solutions there might be. I think you're right that, right
now, there are no good options (aside from using erotic stories as the outlet) but
perhaps in the future something can be done which helps protect children from
predators and abusers while also addressing the attractions of the adults. Maybe VR
offers such a path.
In this story, specifically, remember this is fantasy and should never be confused
with how reality would go. Brent (and Dahlia) are allowed to fulfill desires with
Lily and Orchid as erotic fiction. The reality of such situations would be horrific and
I hope you and other readers understand that I write these stories to provide a
safe outlet which allows children to avoid the damaging, destructive reality of
acting out these fantasies.
Bigbikerz
12 November 2016
I salute you......after a long wait....now, looks like a new door is going to
open...a door to more fun and venture to the family.....I wish this story will
last forever...congrats...good writing, easy to read and understand...keep up the
work and thanks for everything......Shipwrecked next....waiting for it.....
Thank you, Bigbikerz! The family in this story provides me a lot of "play room" with
various ideas and I love to see them explore new themes and opportunities. Lots more
to follow!
Becca Becca
31 October 2016
hi, i have been reading your flower petals stories....wow.
very erotic, i love them! i think you owe me some new panties lol
Thank you so much, Becca! I'd be glad to trade you a new pair of
panties for the ones you soiled! :D
FYI I just published chapter 68 of FP, so I hope you enjoy it!
Anonymous
17 October 2016
Doing great keep it up!
Many thanks!
Eddie
8 October 2016
I read the entire story before commenting. You have done an excellent job.
I always have a large erection while reading this.
I cannot wait for much more in the saga. Thanks for the wonderful story
Thank you, Eddie! It is always a pleasure to know a reader finds my work arousing!
Tempest
4 October 2016
Im just getting ready to start chapter 22. I love the pacing of
this story -- everything just happening as it would in reality. Great storytelling.
Many thanks, Tempest! I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
Yuri
2 October 2016
Thanks God, you come back. We long time are waiting.... FP its amazing,
and continued is better, but you deepest in SadoMazo (?), its not
interesting for me. Love! And only LOVE! Please! Do not ending this story.
Write more and more!!!! With Russia with L O V E!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you, Yuri! More Flower Petals coming. I've got several chapters written, I just need to
edit and format them for the site. Soon!
ironic990
20 September 2016
Flower Power please! Fall arrives in two days...I'm missing the girls!
Thanks for all your great writing...
Sorry I missed the start of fall by a few days, but new chapters going up in October!
Anonymous
18 September 2016
Best story wver but still waiting for the next chapters. Any idea when they will be
coming? Looking forward in anticipatiom!!
Thank you! New Chapters starting to go up October 1.
Anonymous
16 September 2016
Over a year and no more chapters? This has been a great story! Please keep it going!!!
Wow! How did a whole year go by without new Flower Petals? No idea how that happened.
New chapters going up in early October.
Anonymous
1 September 2016
When When???? Dying to read more!!!
Sorry about the delay, new chapters coming up!
Sean
21 August 2016
Love your work keep it up :-)
Thank you so much!
Anonymousgeoff
15 June 2016
Hey??? chapter 62-3-4-5-6-7-8 etc? Back to Key West? Xmas? you have
me hooked - do not cut the line
I will come back to FP this summer, but first I'm trying to finish up
3 other series (Shipwrecked, Run, and Groundhog Nights).
Anonymous
13 June 2016
Mommies ...good mommies can make all the difference in the
world. Delightful story. Reader wants things to accelerate and
indeed they should. Perfect opportunity for Lily's mommie to revel
that she is actually a pedo mom and she has endless plans for her
baby daughter...
Thanks for the compliments. I think you'll find that FP has
conflicted, emotionally connected 'Mommies' but not the devious
Bond-villain style plotter you are looking for here.
Anonymous64
27 May 2016
Love this how soon do we get more stories from you!!!?????????????
Glad to see you eager for more. I hope very soon (June 2016.)
Anonymous
18 March 2016
Just read the first chapter of Flower Petals. It was awesome.
Being someone who has had many experiences with worn panties,
I can really relate and understand the intense feelings of this story.
I can not wait to read about him and Orchids panties.
I am
sure many men have used worn one before but do not recognize just
how special it is to have such a girl's intimate thing up close.
You describe worn panties so well. Do you also have first
hand experiences?
I'm so glad you enjoyed that scene in Flower Petals, I hoped it
was powerful and evoked the thrill of such acts. I've certainly had
my fair share of those sorts of moments, and I'm always looking for
more. There's nothing like that scent, and each woman's is unique.
Nothing like it at all. I hope you have read on into the series
and continue to enjoy it.
Anonymous
13 January 2016
I really have been enjoying this story. I must say, the writing itself
is very well done. Hopefully you have some updates soon.
Thanks so much! I will definitely be adding new content to FP as soon
as I have a few days to get some writing in. Stay tuned!
Shoe
20 October 2015
I have followed this story with mixed interest. Thanks for sharing.
Found this error in the second paragraph of the chapter. Maria was
tired and went to be [bed] early
Thanks, Shoe! I'll get that fixed, much appreciated!
Angus
30 August 2015
Thank you! Your are a marvelous and talented story teller and
writer. I continue to thoroughly enjoy and appreciate your work.
Best regards!!
Thank you, Angus! Hope you will enjoy new chapters when I publish them!
Inky
30 August 2015
The 'Captcha' page was totally blank!
I enjoyed Flower Petals and
look forward to the next chapters.
Unlike some of
the arrogant commentators on Literotica, I am not going to tell you the way
the story should go.
A couple of comments. I think a 34yr old
man would have a longer post orgasm recovery time and would probably be incapable
of staying erect after cumming or be capable of twice in a few minutes.
However, unlike the majority of stories on ASSTR, this is well written, and contains
few grammatical or spelling errors. Well done!
Thank you, Inky!
Re: CAPTCHA: Unfortunately, this is out of my hands. ASSTR handles
that aspect (I cannot control the CAPTCHA and whether/how it appears), and the CAPTCHA
isn't working in several browsers for all authors on the site.
Re: multiple
orgasms: While I agree that many men would indeed take longer periods of recover
I have known several who were even older than Brent who did/do not and who are quite
capable of maintaining erection even after ejaculation. It is a fantasy, after all,
so I hope this aspect isn't marring the story for you. Thanks again for the compliments!
Anonymous
16 July 2015
Have you forgotten that you have a LOT of readers waiting for more chapters
of this amazing story? It's been over TWO months for Flower Petals while
it seems "Ship Wrecked" and "Ground Hog Nights" have all your attentions.
I'm glad you are looking forward to more FP. I can only write in the series which
are flowing. In recent weeks, that has mostly been Shipwrecked and Groundhog Nights.
I will get back to Flower Petals when that series is 'talking to me' again. Until then,
I won't force anything just to get new content out. As readers, you deserve my
best efforts, and that doesn't happen if I try to force out new chapters.
enola reven
21 May 2015
So far, this has been a remarkable journey. After he left the camp abruptly and
fell asleep in the hotel i was sure the story would end there but, you've done
a remarkable job of bringing two seperate lives together into a singular
experience, while keeping me on the edge of suspense and wonder. bravo! i cant
wait to read more of this tastefully modest and emotional journey.
Thank you enola! I've tried hard to let the story unfold in a 'natural' way without
forcing the 'money shot' into the series. I am glad you are enjoying it!
TPKing
20 May 2015
This is one of the best stories that I have ever read. You are a very
good writer and I look forward to reading more.
Thanks, TPKing! I really appreciate the compliments!
Redfreak
11 May 2015
Awesome story, great writing I've enjoyed this so much! Became a fan of
alternate societal standards from my favorite author of all time, Robert
A. Heinlen. His voice was the first to tell me that societies values need
not be mine.
Hope you write more chapters, really want to see
how you resolve the extended family issues not to mention the anticipation of
all those lactating tits!!! Big Fan, Redfreak
Thank you so much, Redfreak! Heinlein is a favorite of mine as well, and
I love his thoughts on challenging norms in society.
I'll definitely
have more chapters for FP in the future, I really enjoy writing about
the characters and the challenges they face!
Hngrymann
8 May 2015
mmm just found your story and I must say I have SO enjoyed edging to it!
Your writing style and the way you develop the characters and going inside
the main male character's head with thoughts and feelings is wonderful and
yes places the reader in his place.
Thank you for sharing your
talents and of course I so LOVE this genre of fiction!
Thank you so much, Hngrymann! Flower Petals has been a lot of fun to work
on, and I have a lot more to add to the story in the future. Hope you
continue to enjoy the series!
Anonymous
8 May 2015
A turn on and great reading, my Fantasy since I can remember playing
with my dick, even as a lad.
Thanks for the kind words!
Donald
5 May 2015
LOVING your "Shipwrecked" and "Flower Petals", of course. I can easily
understand how they are the most popular. Popular themes, very popular
story lines, and I know you will disagree, but "Joe Every Man" can picture
himself in place of the main chars in both. Not to mention, OF COURSE,
the GREAT!!! writing. Authors can capture us with the stroke effect for a
few chapters, maybe. But it's the excellent writing that keeps us glued to
the monitor(s) waiting for the next chapter.
Recent updates have
brought me back to "Flower Petals" from chapter 1. It's as good on my 3rd
time as the first two times I read it! :)
I also enjoyed "I Never
Saw Her Again". "Helen" and "The Shitting Fields" and ... heck, all of them.
Now, granted, some of those ARE way out there encounters, but then again,
that's what they should be in that story line. Heck, if things like that
happened often or every day, one WOULD see her again. :P
Oh hell!
Love all your works! Going to start "Diary Of A Loose Girl" when I'm done
with "Petals" for the 3rd time. Believe it or not, haven't read that one
yet (according to my browser and feeble memory).
In closing, again,
THANK YOU for sharing and giving: your time, your vision, your writing.
1M words and counting! You have given us much! Thank You!
Wow! Many, many sincere thanks, Donald. It is very gratifying to know you
enjoy my writing. It can take a lot of time and energy, for sure, but I really
love to do it and share it with others.
I do actually think that having
"Joe Every Man" be able to see himself in the plot is key to many of the stories,
certainly Flower Petals. That's why there is often a decided lack of description of
the narrator's looks, including penis size and facial hair. It lets the reader
see through the eyes whatever they want about the first-person giving the view.
I hope you continue to enjoy my writing!
Anonymous
1 May 2015
Some great erotica, but I have to say that I hope I never read or hear the word
mewled again. Talk about overuse of a word. There are a myriad of other decriptors
that could have been used, but you stuck witI what seems to be your favourite word.
Also, I feel there is a bit of a hole in your plot involving Orchid's mother and Brent's
exwife. What happened to her? From your initial chapters it seems unlikely that Brent's ex
would just abandon Orchid to Brent. Given her almost bipolar description, I would have thought
that she would be a pernicious thorn in Brent's and Orchid's side. Is she in an insane asylum,
one that doesn't allow outside contact? What's up with her?
I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
As far as using 'mewled'... I checked the master document. The words
'mewled' and 'mewling' are in there a grand total of 21 times in over 170,000 words.
Hardly seems like 'overuse'.
The term isn't one that I think has a great deal of 'other descriptors' which would convey the
same thing. I use that word on purpose, even knowing it can have sad connotations by common definitions.
But I think it fits exactly the sound I wish conveyed, and in context, the reader hopefully understands
it is an imitative sound of contentment rather than a feeble cry. Somewhere between a whimper and a purr,
perhaps.
Would you prefer I use 'whimper'? That conveys a very different sense
to me. 'Bleat'? No way. 'Cry'? No way. I use 'purr' sometimes to convey a similar sound and
context. Sorry that it is a distraction, but 21 times across 52 chapters hardly seems
excessive to me.
As for Malory, her part of the story has been intentionally put aside for
a while. I cannot focus on every detail in the world, and though Malory played an important
role early on, the focus for the story is on Orchid and Brent. I had to let go some of the plot ideas
I had around Malory in order to move things forward.
There are some parallel events going on that cause Malory's absense from the tale,
but I won't get into them here. I get that it feels like a 'hole.' I
don't want the reader to overly concern him/herself with her part except as necessary in the early chapters.
While I won't reveal the details, Malory has not been forgotten and her part in the story may again surface.
Mary
20 March 2015
Just a quick line to say how much of a turn on that story was.
Many thanks, Mary! I hope to have new chapters of FP up in the coming days/weeks for
you to enjoy.
Rodney
9 March 2015
I'm anxiously waiting for you to post more chapters to "Flower Petals."
So sorry about the delayed response, I've been in the hospital and recovering for a few weeks.
I'll get new chapters of FP going soon.
dachief
16 February 2015
Such a wicked, evil mind you have!!!!! ;-)
When will one of the
little ones get pregnant?
There's no rush towards that in the story because it attempts to draw an arbitrary line at
what the characters would 'plausibly' do. I know, a stretch give Orchid and Lily's behavior,
but pregnancy of a thirteen and ten-year old girl don't fit in these characters' lives.
Dan
16 February 2015
I have just read the 16 or 17 episodes of "Flower Petals" and I loved it.
I particularly appreciated the slow build up, the secluded camping site, and the
slow but steady development of the story.
There is tendency for some repetition during
the sex between the adults Brent and Dahlia, but this did not seriously interfere with the
story. The slow development between Brent and the girls is powerful stuff for some of your
readers, certainly mine.
However, I certainly hope that you continue
more chapters than just 17. You most certainly have room for Lily and Orchid, Brent and
Orchid, and then including Brent with one then both of the younger girls, and then
include Dahlia etc. etc.
I'm glad you enjoy Flower Petals! It is a fun series to write, and I love the characters.
There are many more chapters available, so I hope in the weeks since
you wrote me, you found them and enjoyed them as well. The series has 52 chapters now.
TDaddy
2015 February 9
I don't think it'd be that out of character for Orchid and Brent to decide to
have a baby girl. I think, like many couples, an instinct hits. Once they've
educated themselves that there is less danger of defects than if a woman 40
were to have a baby, I think it would be clear. Then Brent could have the full
relationship with the new daughter like he'd wanted all along with Orchid, but
with Orchid helping guide what would be best.
I do appreciate the feedback, but I have to sincerely disagree with this sentiment.
Remember, Brent still struggles with what happened between Lily and her father, and
putting him in a situation where he and Orchid have a 'full relationship' with a young
girl (younger than Lily by years) is unrealistic. It would feel forced to me, as if
the point of the narrative was to push fetishes into the plot rather than letting the
plot and characters dictate what happens.
The same is true with the pregnancy idea. Again,
Orchid is on birth control, and we already have two pregnant women now in the cast. She's
thirteen and I cannot see Brent being alright with impregnating his young teen daughter.
Anonymous
25 January 2015
Would love to see Orchid get pregnant by her daddy.
Maybe. I won't reveal future plot points, but keep in mind that this story is
attempting to stick to a 'realistic' feel of sorts. Yeah, it is all fantasy and
certainly not 'real,' but Orchid getting pregnant at this point isn't something
which would be in character for Orchid or Brent. Also, Orchid is on birth control,
so they would have to willfully attempt to get pregnant, not something either
character is likely to do.
DerMeister
20 January 2015
I also have to agree with Chase with regard to a "middle aged" man able to
have multiple erections/orgasms in a short period. When I was stationed in Bavaria and
surrounded by Beautiful Frauleins, I could accomplish that as well, but NOT every day.
Brent isn't doing it every day either, so it's entirely plausible.
P.S. What
do we have to do Chase, to get you off that Island and back to Flower Petals? ;-)
Thanks, DerMeister. I can guarantee that many 32-year old men, when given nothing better to do but
have sex with beautiful women, would have no problem with a 4-5 cumshot day. Like you say,
not every day, but not out of the realm of possibilities, either. It's all fantasy, anyway, so
why not have a 'superpower' if you need to think of it like that :)
Re: new chapters,
soon! I had a lot of Shipwrecked that I wanted to get written, getting to the end of that
loop now, so I'll be back on other series soon.
Anonymous
18 January 2015
Good story but with one caveat, he's a middle aged man and while
I could believe two maybe three orgasms, I find it unrealistic to
read that he had 4 or 5 erections.
Thanks for the compliments. I have to disagree that a 32-year old man is
"middle aged." Far from it, in many ways. Plus, Brent is in shape and has a high
sex drive, is surrounded by several beautiful females, including his daughter.
While the overall story stretches the bounds of 'realism' I don't think four or
five orgasms is all that unreasonable, even if sometimes overdone for effect.
Crazy Bear
16 January 2015
This is a great story, I'll admit it took a couple of chapters to feel
as if I was looking over Brent's shoulders all the time. It's all believable
and the story flows. Oh I love the sex, all of it and the character's are
all plausible. I don't mean this to sound clinical, I'm not pulling this to
bits, I love it. I am also a writer and have a novel on ASSTR and a few
others in the pipeline, but I don't do the website thing yet.
Please do keep this going, I'm looking forward to Maria melding into the
family, opening up her feelings towards Orchid and the births of the
two children.
Thanks, CB! I hope you continue to enjoy the series. I'll check out your
story as well.
Anonymous
15 January 2015
Love it! thanks for writing and sharing
My pleasure, thanks!
DerMeister
14 January 2015
What I love about your style of writing the sexual aspect, is that you make it a
"loving" relationship between Brent and which ever female he's with. None of that
"suggestive" porn crap we see from other authors. There is no coercion, no hidden
agenda, just a loving relationship with each female.
Thanks, DerMeister! I definitely put a lot of effort into keeping the narrative
full of emotional closeness. I hate forcing characters into things they wouldn't do, and
to me, the most plausible pathway to get them into taboo relationships is through kindness
and love.
JoeScrewloose
14 January 2015
I'm not the most eloquent of people and commenting is hardly a forte of mine but
I shall endeavour to do my best. I have read all of this tale (into the early hours
of the morning) and I have to say that it's a beautiful story. If I were to criticise it
would only to be to say that I wish the chapters were longer and more frequent. That aside,
it is well constructed, well told and wonderful to read. I offer you my most sincere thanks
for writing this and sharing it.
Many thanks! I really appreciate your comments. FP has been a fun series to write,
and I love the characters. I'll have some more chapters up over the coming days as the
inclusion of Maria plays out and the pregnancies go on. Hope you enjoy!
DerMeister
11 January 2015
FINALLY! Someone got pregnant! I hope Maria becomes part of the Family now.
I would imagine ALL the females would love that too. Nice Job!
:) Glad you enjoyed that, DerMeister. More to come about Maria in Chapter 45+
Anonymous
11 January 2015
(refers to Chapter 42) Wow! What a comeback!!! I knew it would not be
long before you had to
take a next step with this family. Really well done, and again, for
an unbelievable situation, you crafted it quite believably... Amazed...
Thank you so much! Even though it is farfetched and all fantasy, I always
try to keep the sexual scenes organic and as believable as possible.
Anonymous
9 January 2015
great story !!!!! love it.
Thank you!
Adam77
5 January 2015
loved reading all 41 chapters of flower petals can wait to
read more you are an excellent writer I look forward to reading more
chapters of this story merry belated xmas and happy new year
Thanks, Adam77. Belated same to you and yours!
Dandy Tago
18 October 2014
You are amazing. I love how much romance and emotional connection
you put into your stories. I have fallen in love with Bailey and Amy
and Orchid and others of your characters because you do such an amazing
job of giving them depth and volition and motivation.
I just
re-read the first few chapters of Shipwrecked, and even on a second pass,
it holds up so well. It really draws me in. And the realism that you
insert: the grappling with the world outside of these relationships and
how the relationships are impacted by the world around them -- it blows me
away and inspires me.
Also, the way you balance the myriad
connections between your characters, is really skillful. You keep everyone
active in the story and keep the romance and sex balanced as well.
I'm in awe of your work. Not only have I enjoyed reading your stories and
fapping to them, but I have learned a lot from you as a writer as well.
Wow, thank you so much, Dandy Tago! I really appreciate the feedback!
Retcar
17 October 2014
It's been about a month now. Are you still alive over there?
Loving the story so far, and watching things develop and gradually get
kinkier.
One random thing I've been thinking of, is that with
the new house being built... wouldn't it cause too much isolation for
the characters? Especially the girls, something about mingling with peers
their own age and stuff.
On a different note: Things seem to
have been going rather smoothly for our protagonist... So yeah, I'm
curious to see how long that lasts. Because I've a feeling it won't.
Either way, I'm looking forward to more. Hope you're doing okay.
Thanks, Retcar. I had a couple of deaths in my family that were difficult and
took me away from writing for a few months.
Good thoughts on the isolation,
definitely something I've thought about and will explore later in the series. Not
sure when I'll get to the next FP chapter, but there is more on the way for sure.
Anonymous
4 September 2014
So far love the novel. Can't wait for the continuation of the story. Thks
Thank you!
Anonymous
2 September 2014
Wow - best story I've read in YEARS. Touches on many of my personal
fantasies. And you have a great way of writing that builds story plot
and excitement - without ever getting boring.
I don't normally
comment but this story just moved me to action.
My thanks, very glad you are enjoying it!
Tom
2014 August 28
Love that you have taken on some new characters hereナAfter the intensity of the
inter-familial segment, it will be a very intriguing dynamic to see some interaction,
even if it only at a philosophical level, with like-minded people. I'm sure you
will handle it well,and I look forward to reading the new chapters...
Thank you, Tom! Will see where things go from here. I don't want to get off the main
plot priorities too far, but will be interesting for sure.
Anonymous
2014 August 28
Again...well written and very very HOT
Thank you :)
Maxxx
2014 August 27
Very good story. I'll have to go back and catch up in the earlier chapters!
Thanks, Maxxx, hope you enjoy the earlier chapters!
Dimmy
2014 August 23
This Story is absolutely phenomenal! Thank you so much for writing it and I
look forward to reading so many more!
Thank you, Dimmy!
Jim
2014 August 18
Great story! Can't help but fantasize along with the story line.
Thanks again, Jim!
Jim
2014 August 13
Finally finished the chapters so far and loved every one of them. The progression
is so good and everything makes sense. All the eroticism of how each one interacts
with the other is amazing. Great job and I'll be reading each additional chapter.
Thanks Jim, it has been a fun story to write!
Jim
2014 August 13
Sooooo HOT
Thank you!
Jim
2014 August 13
Great story. I can't stop reading each chapter. The progression is
excellent, erotically written and very well done. I'm definitely hooked to
keep reading.
Thanks, Jim! Very glad you are enjoying it, hope to have more chapters ready soon!
Anonymous
2014 August 12
Very well written and keeps me on the edge wondering how things are
going to happen. Liking this series a lot.
Many thanks!
Anonymous
2014 August 12
Very Hot!
Thank you!
Charlie
2014 August 11
Wonderful story so far, and I'm eagerly awaiting the continuation of the
story. A great job so far. Keep it up. Thanks.
Thanks, Charlie! More to come.
Anonymous 64
2014 July 9
Great stories! How have you been feeling? Hope you are up to
sharing some more of your top 3 stories!!?????????
Doing much better, thanks! More of FP, Shipwrecked, Run, LG, and others coming soon!
Anonymous
2014 June 26
Get well, quick!! Flower Petals has left us hanging with anticipation
Doing better, new FP on the way soon!
Anonymous
2014 June 11
Keep them cumming... I mean coming.. I love this series
Thanks! Glad you enjoy!
Anonymous
2014 June 8
One of your best stories wish you would wright more of this and
shipwrecked cant wait to see whats next
Thank you!
tdaddy
2014 June 6
I'm hoping Dahlia or even Orchid have a baby girl(s) soon.
Could be a lot of chapters to follow there.
More to come, hope you are enjoying the series! :)
Liz
2014 June 4
I agree with the other commenter, all three of them should end up pregnant eventually.
Hi Liz, Thanks for commenting. I hope you are enjoying the series! Definitely
more to come for them soon, maybe even some big bellies :)
Anonymous
2014 June 3
Would love to read of Dahlia, Orchid, and Lilly's being
impregnated by Brent. Hope that's where you're heading in the
future with installments.
We'll see :) Brent and Dahlia are certainly trying!
Chris
2014 May 29
I just would like to say, this story, this image of LOVE you
have put down on paper has brought me back to the love I enjoyed
many years ago. Thank you for bringing them all back to there full
memory so that I can feel like I did back then to the fullest.
Thanks, Chris! It has been a very pleasurable story to write
(in many ways) and I'm glad it resonates with you and brings good
memories back for you to recall and enjoy. Just posted chapter 36,
hope you continue to enjoy the series!
Anonymous
2014 May 28
Great story so far. Thanks. Keep writing.
Thank you! I will. :)
Anonymous
2014 May 28
Wish you'd give up the "dropped subject" sentence structure.
Nobody talks like that. Drives others crazy. Sounds affected very
quickly. Totally stands out. Makes me want to gag.
Sorry if my writing style doesn't match your tastes. Many 'others' seem to be
driven 'crazy' by the story and the sex rather than the syntax, based on
the overly-positive feedback I've received.
Anonymous
2014 May 26
I really enjoyed reading your story.
Thanks for reading!
Randi
2014 May 23
Excellent story! A exceedingly well written erotic tale involving
an altogether taboo subject. Loved the flower-based names - like your
idea of the happy family. Keep at it...
Thank you, Randi! Very happy you like the series!
carpenter
2014 May 22
HOOOORAY , that is all,carry on .
:)
Anonymous
2014 May 22
Love the story, it's nice to read something that isn't wham bam thank you mam.
My pleasure! Thanks for reading!
Anonymous
2014 May 20
That is awesome ,please make dahlia pregnant & do some
lactating ,it would be hot if she breastfeed her family naked
and more smell fetish,more hairy armpits if that's ok
Thanks for the comments! Brent's definitely working on getting
Dahlia pregnant, will it work? Stay tuned! Might work in the armpits.
I've never really explored that in writing, might fit in this series or
others.
Bob
2014 May 13
I got notice today of the new chapter for "Flower Petals". I couldn't wait
to read it! Fantastic! As usual, your writing is great. Thanks so much.
Thanks, Bob! Very glad to be back.
Anonymous
2014 May 8
Enjoyed your stories but havent seen any new chapters in a while
Real life needed me, unfortunately, but I've published new chapters this week.
Anonymous
2014 April 1
I love this story my question that I can't wait to find out is when Orchid is
deflowered is she alone with her father or does Lilly and Her Mom join in to
complete the family coming together
:) That scene will be coming up soon!
lecajun
2014 March 26
I sure hope your vacation ends soon I'm DT'n for new chapters in all your story's. cum back soon
Sorry for the delay, thanks for your patience!
Sandwich
2014 March 26
I'm dying here. You truly have the gift. Hours tick by as your words
keep me mesmerized and entirely in the moment. I fear it won't be too long for my next fix!
Many thanks! Sorry for the long time between updates, but new chapters are now up!
Anonymous
2014 March 25
Where have you gone? nothing for nearly 3 weeks, I doubt I'm the only
one waiting on tender-hooks...
Darn real life, always intruding when all I want to do is describe the wetness between
Orchid's labia :)
SB
2014 March 24
As much as I am enjoying Petals, I feel there is a bit of a rush with
Orchid since you broke through the barrier. Everything involving Lily has been
done with such patience and detail. I think you are making the same mistake many
people do once a relationship is taken past the point of intimacy and rush through
moments that should matter as much as any other in the story. It trivializes the
entire act of intimacy that you have been working so hard to achieve.
Thanks for the feedback, SB. I don't agree about rushing compared to Lily. Within four chapters or
so, Lily was already involved with Brent. Orchid's slow build has been going on for a much longer time,
including after the first contact. Time passes without much notice in the story, so there are
weeks of the first steps before the next, it just doesn't make sense to narrate every since moment,
though I certainly try to give full coverage to the important and meaningful moments.
Anonymous
2014 March 22
Wow, we really need the next chapters of this awesome story.
I know you're probably busy with life as well a writing stories.
Thank you for you hard work.
Thanks for your compliments and patience, 2 new chapters up this week!
Anonymous
2014 March 20
Love the storie keep it going
Thank you!
Butch
2014 March 17
Great series . well done and I look forward to the future chapters.
I hope to read more from you in the future.
Very glad you are enjoying it, many thanks!
Davey
2014 March 17
Good tale which dwells on the dark side of human nature. How many
father's have erotic thoughts about their daughters, most doing nothing
about it but when the daughter is happily willing, then act I wonder. Not
as I am suggesting child abuse, only wondering, and of course using your
imagination to take a peep into my own. Thanks for an enjoyable series.
Thanks, Davey. I am sure many fathers are sexually attracted to their own
daughters. As long as it remains fantasy only, that's ok with me!
tdaddy
2014 March 16
Great story, really one of the best I've read in some time. Normally I
get a read or two max out of a story, but I've repeatedly came back to this
one many, many times. I don't have your writing talent, but definitely have
some ideas for stories and/or chapters if you'd be interested. Keep up the
great work. We all look forward to what you'll bring next.
Great to hear from you and I appreciate your compliments!
I'm always open to ideas you want to share. I can't promise to be able to
put it into a story or series, but sometimes I can. Please share if you would like!
Anonymous
2014 March 14
Keep them coming...
:) Thanks
Anonymous
2014 March 11
What an amazing story! You have a real talent for writing and
I truly appreciate that you have shared it with this community.
I have read these first 22 chapters over the past few days and am just
enthralled by the emotions playing out here. I cannot wait to enjoy the
rest of the story. Thanks so much for the time you have put into this.
My thanks! I really love that you are enjoying it!
eddieroq
2014 March 10
Just read Flower Petals, great story,well written, really hot,can't wait for next chapter
Thanks for the compliments, very glad you enjoy the series!
Kathy
2014 March 9
I've very much enjoyed your "Flower Petals" story. I've savored each
chapter and each one has brought back beautiful memories triggering
intense orgasms. I'm now moving on to chapter 5 and I'm wet with anticipation.
I love your long descriptive build-ups to the inevitable climax and how you leave
us wanting more. The thought of that young girl licking your cum from between her
mother's legs sent shivers down my spine. It was a very nice touch.
Thanks so much for the compliments! I hope you have continued to enjoy the
series after the first few chapters.
Anonymous
2014 March 9
Without a doubt, one of the hottest stories here! It seems that each
chapter opens the door for even more possibilities. For example I can see
Orchid and her father returning to the park and that Redhead shows up again.
This time she sees that she is being watched and invites Orchid to lick her
pussy, possibly becoming a good "friend" of the family.
Thanks for the compliments! You should consider writing some stories, I like the
way you think :)
Anonymous
2014 March 8
A delight to read Flower Petals. Plot and scenes so hot.
Big compliment for editing too. The scene with Dahlia on the bench,
both clothed, had me going - love the sneaky stuff. Thanks so much for your work.
:) My pleasure, thank you!
sue
2014 March 7
Just so wonderful love it so much can't wait for more to come, so
sexy cant stop reading them makes me tingle inside how I would love
that to have happened to me when I was younger a caring loving family
like that, to have Brent Orchid and Lily together would send Brent
into another world, thank you so much xxx
Hi Sue, thank you so much! The series has been a lot of fun to write,
so I'm really happy that you are enjoying it. Definitely more on the way.
Tom
2014 March 7
THROBBING!!! Whew, what a scene!!! I never saw it coming, but WOW
that was hot!!! Beautifully crafted to the point that it was even believable!
(author's note - refers to Chapter 29)
Thanks Tom!
getzhard
2014 March 7
As much as I am enjoying "Shipwrecked", am really engrossed with
"Flower Petals" even more! The build-up is coming along just right, and
can hardly wait for the next chapter! I look two and three times a day for
new chapters, and don't know how you find the time in each day to write new
ones! Please keep it going, and also am looking forward to the 2nd year of
"My Jewish Princess"!
Thanks again, getzhard! I'm loving writing the series for sure!
I am starting to get interested in writing the next Year of MJP, so there
may be some new chapters coming in the next couple of weeks.
Anonymous
2014 March 7
The best erotic fiction I've ever had the pleasure of reading,
and I've been reading on ASSTR for 20 years alone.
If you don't write for a living you should.
Wow, thank you so much! :D
neverhood
2014 March 6
please keep going I check my phone during the day to see what my
night is going to be, hoping it involves a new chapter and where the
characters are going. I can see a few thing I believe would be good but
you beat me to or improve it. One thing I am looking forward to is orchid
seeing Brent with lily together and wanting that for herself with a lot of
jealousy and giving it to Brent harder to show up lily! I want to believe
that lily wanted to have sex with Brent and that is what lily whispered to
her mother before they left for home.
Thanks for the dedication, neverhood! I won't reveal future plot points, but
there are definitely some fun and arousing times in the next few chapters!
Anonymous
2014 March 5
Best story I've ever read on here.
:D Thank you!
John
2014 March 5
Eating cream pies....my very favorite thing to do...if the cum came from someone else!
(Author's Note - refers to Chapter 4)
Whatever turns you on and hurts no one, great!
John
2014 March 5
My wife always wanted me to cum twice in a row.....made it three times once....:)
(Author's Note - refers to Chapter 3)
:D
John
2014 March 5
very unusual, but enjoyable! (Author's Note - refers to Chapter 2)
Great!
John
2014 March 5
very enjoyable, but mysterious~~~ (Author's Note - refers to Chapter 1)
Thanks!
Anonymous
2014 March 5
Amazing stuff, it does not get boring or repetitive at all, and the
plot twists are very professional. Great work, keep on going!
Many thanks! Definitely more planned to be published soon!
Anonymous
2014 March 4
wonderfully written and highly erotic - definitely one of the best stories I've
ever read. please continue
Thank you! More chapters on the way
timelessfunhuman
2014 March 4
Thank you...I have so enjoyed reading your story...
I look forward to the next chapter
You're welcome, chapter 24 just published!
Mike The Marine
2014 March 3
Really enjoy your stories. Could you hurry and get Orchid
sexually involved with everyone. My dick is getting frustrated waiting .
Thanks! Working toward it, gotta let the characters play things out in a
natural way, hope you'll keep reading!
Anonymous
2014 March 3
I love this series. You can't write it fast enough
:) Tell me about it! Thank you.
Anonymous
2014 March 2
I am loving the story each chapter is better then the last .
but i'm also waiting for more adventures from your story
Travels with Charlemagne. i hope you will bring us more of both stories soon .
Thank you! Another chapter of FP just posted, I'll be getting more
Charlemagne again soon, just waiting for the muse to hit me on that one.
southernman2000
2014 March 2
I keep reading........ I read faster than you write. Interesting story
line........ I have enjoyed it. I am hopeful that you keep it going up to
the 40 chapters and maybe a few extra chapters. I also enjoy the Ship Wrecked story.
Look forward to more chapters and maybe more stories
Thanks, southerman2000! Very happy to deliver stories you are enjoying!
Anonymous
2014 March 2
Alright, enough is enough! I have been following this story
from the start and every few days I check for new chapters like
some kind of soap opera fiend, and you keep leaving me hanging
every time. I can't take it anymore. Enough suspense already!
:) I'm hoping this is a bit sarcastic and you are really enjoying it.
I know everyone wants the 'payoff scene' but I hope what you like about
my stories is that nothing is forced. The characters will decide when each next
step happens, not me ;)
Garland
2014 March 2
It keeps getting better, Thanks for the note telling me
chapter 14 was posted, i didn't expect all the other
chapters but was glad they were there. Looking forward to more chapters.
Thanks for a great read.
You're welcome, Garland! Very happy you are enjoying the series!
mj
2014 March 2
please tell about helping her with her periods. tampons pads and
douching after the period. i have never seen this in a story.
thanks for your work peace
There's a bit in Chapter 23 on this subject, but it's not really
a focus of the chapter. Remember, Orchid's been 'mature' for a while
and doesn't need a lot of help knowing what to do. Sorry, that doesn't
quite fit here, but maybe I'll work that into another story somewhere.
Anonymous
2014 March 1
I've lived inside this wonderful narrative from start to this
22nd chapter and feel a sense of awe and warm tenderness as this
life-like story unfolds. Every nuance in this loving texture seeks
to overwhelm me as I languish fully hard in its surreal ambience.
Everything is so believable, even though concocted, that I yearned to
be Brent and experience what he went through, every feeling and lucious
moment. Thank you so much for eliciting these powerful feelings in me
even though they could never be played out in This real life, nor were
they ever. Keep going - can't wait to hear more...
Wonderful! I am so glad you are able to feel each moment in a special
way. I love hearing that you feel like you are there. :)
Anonymous
2014 March 1
I am totally enjoying your story. Thanks for sharing your art!
You're welcome, thank you!
emmett
2014 March 1
one word WOW!!! chase you could do 50 more chapters of flower petals
( which the majority of your fans hope you do) but none will be as
cleverly written as chapter 22 where you had to deal with the inevitability
of orchid learning of the relationship just cant wait to see how the
relationship of this quartet develops
:) Thanks emmett!
It was possibly the hardest chapter to write in any of my series so far.
I needed to get 'over the hump' on the single most significant plot point in the
whole story, and I really wanted to get it right. I sat on it a day or so and
reread it, looking to see if it still felt like the conflict and challenges were
real enough.
Obviously, Orchid's reaction lays the basis for what follows, and given
that I'd gone 21 chapters (now 22) without yet producing the 'payoff' scene
between father and daughter, teasing out the relationship, I tried hard to keep
this chapter in the same realm of plausibility as the slow build to date and move
it across a really important decision point for both of them without taking shortcuts
(well, no more than any romantic incest fab stories do, anyway).
tdawg
2014 March 1
really really really enjoying this series, I don't think I have
returned to this site as often just waiting for the next chapter
Thanks, tdawg! I get them up as quick as possible :)
Anonymous
2014 March 1
I have absolutely loved this series. Thank you so much for sharing!
You're welcome! :)
Anonymous
2014 February 27
amazing story thanks
You're welcome, thanks for reading!
Anonymous
2014 February 26
Really good story!
Thank you!
Anonymous
2014 February 26
Please hurry with chapter 18.
I'm adding chapters as fast as I can :)
Anonymous
2014 February 26
excellent writing
it keeps me wanting to read more
unusually good
Many thanks!
Jake
2014 February 25
Love the story. I am jerking hard. Can't wait to read more.
Hope he fucks the daughter too. Thank you
Awesome! :) Hope you enjoy many orgasms from the story! More chapters coming soon!
Jeff
2014 February 25
Hi just finished reading up to chapter 16 of Flower Petals and wow I am
so blown away with your writing! I cannot tell you how many times I have
shot my load reading about this wonderful combination of Brent, Lily, Orchid
and Dahlia! The story is extremely good, plausible, I am sure happens between
families,the writing is brilliant, and as for the sexy well that is just mind
blowingingly fantastic! I cannot wait for the next chapter. May I ask whether
you have a list of people that you let know when a chapter is posted? I
unfortunately miss chapters posted by people I like to read and that is so
annoying! I am a totally devoted fan of yours and would love to read other
stories you have written. I hope to be able to find them. Thanks so much for
this story and I hope to read chapter 17 soon!
Thanks, Jeff! Very happy you are enjoying the series! I don't have an email
list currently for updates, but I do keep a
Newest Stories page updated whenever I add
a new chapter.
Love the story. I can't wait to read the next chapters!
Your writing makes me very hard and excited. I just found the
story and read every chapter and was disappointed when I got
to 17 and found it was the last one. Waiting to see how it
develops with Orchid and Lily, and with her dad as well.
Thank you! More chapters on the way soon. Will be some very
interesting developments for Orchid!
fun4holefam
2014 February 23
Love the story. I can't wait to read more. I am so hard right now.
Thanks! I'll have more chapters in the next few days,
keep an eye on the
New Stories page on my website.
Larry
2014 February 23
I am loving this great story. So sexy, erotic, loving and arousing.
Very arousing actually. Between Shipwrecked and Flower Petals I
stay hard a lot. Thanks for sharing.
You're welcome! Thank you! :)
Tom
2014 February 22
This is really interesting how you've woven this chapter. From the
standpoint of sexual labeling, it is actually a study on a changing
dynamic in our society; almost a sociological treatiseナWhat turns us
on? Right? Wrong? As long as no one is hurt, or appropriate physical
boundaries are not crossed, your writing affords a wonderful option
for mental playナLooking forward to the following chapters!
(Author's note - refers to chapter 16)
Thanks, Tom. I believe we really do have no choice in who and what we
are attracted to. We do have a say in how we act on it, which can
make all the difference in the world.
John
2014 February 21
Really loving this story. Good pace, really sexy characters. Can't wait to see how this
story pans out. Keep up the good work.
Many thanks, John! Chapter 14 just put up.
Garland
2014 February 20
Looking to chapter 14. Interesting read, very believable, conflicted emotions
and honest dealing with them makes it.
Thanks, Garland! I just put up Chapter 14, very glad you are enjoying the story!
Mike
2014 February 19
Hurry. This is fantastic. So much love expressed and
very sexy. Thanks
Thanks, Mike, more chapters on the way this week!
Anonymous
2014 February 18
Please hurry!!!!!
Going as fast as I can :)
Rick
2014 February 18
Holy cow Chase, I don't know what I'm going to do while
I wait for the next chapters of this highly erotic story. I
really loved reading about these two people and their girls.
You sir are a really good writer and probably should be working
on a novel for publication. Thank you so much for all of your
stories.
Thanks, Rick! Glad you are enjoying it, I hope to have new chapters
up this week.
Anonymous
2014 February 18
Great story and good pacing. read all chapters in one
sitting. Can't wait for more!
Thank you!
Mary
2014 February 18
aw read them all...was hoping for more!!! hurry and write them!
Thanks again, Mary! I hope to have more chapters up this week,
thanks for reading :)
Anonymous
2014 February 18
Great story and good pacing. read all chapters in one sitting. Can't wait for more!
Thank you!
Mary
2014 February 18
wow...thats all i can say
Thanks Mary!
Anonymous
2014 February 18
I love your story, I've read all 13 chapters without stopping.
I don't really have any ideas, I just wanted you to know that
I'm really, really enjoying your story. I can't wait to read
how things progress with Orchid and her dad and of course with
Lilly and her mom too. It would be fun to chat with you sometime
if you don't mind. Keep it coming.
Hi, and thank you! I do chat occasionally, though it is a rare
thing. What are you interested in chatting about? Very glad you
are enjoying the story!
Another Chase
2014 February 18
Mmmm, can't wait....excellent stuff, very well crafted and
written, and oooh, yes, mature Dahlia's body, and little wild,
capricious, precocious Lily. Can't wait indeed!
Thank you! Should have more chapters coming this week!
Anonymous
2014 February 17
great story, characters, and sex. read all 13 chapters
non-stop. anxious to read the rest.
Many thanks!
Anonymous
2014 February 17
Hi, your a phenomenal writer, I have no idea how you can produce
such a large quantity of work and I'ts still really great writing.
Please keep going and I really hope I can see more of the Tender
Box series soon too, I'm sorry for being a glutton for your work, but its
just so good!
Thank you so much! I will have more Tender Box this week! No apologies
necessary :)
Anonymous
2014 February 17
great story, characters, and sex. read all 13 chapters non-stop.
anxious to read the rest.
Thank you!
Candi
2014 February 17
Flower Petals is one great, hot story! Can't wait for the
next chapters!!!
Jeep up the good work!
Thank you, Candi! I should have more chapters up this week,
hope you enjoy them.
Rick
2014 February 17
Good story, well written> I'll look forward to more
Thanks, Rick!
RSJ
2014 February 16
Wow Chase these two chapters were intense chapter 9 really had me
worked up, I just about busted without even touching myself, yep the
Daddy Daughter thing really gets me. I eagerly await further chapters
of this story and some of the others.
Thanks, RSJ! Just posted Chapters 11 and 12, hope you like!
Tom
2014 February 16
An exceptional chapter!! Brilliant usage if the language of erotica...
(refers to Chapter 9 -- Author)
Thanks Tom!
darlene
2014 February 15
OMG! Loved it so far! It has made me so wet that I need to use a
toy and cum! Please hurry and write more!
Thanks, Darlene! Very glad you like the story. I'll have
more chapters over the next few days!
Red
2014 February 13
Hi Chase, I've just read flower petals, what a wonderful
story. This maybe a fantasy story to many who read it
but to me so much of it is real. I have a female friend
who has two young daughters and we both enjoy smelling
the girls panties as we have sex. It is just great to find
someone who thinks like me and writes about it so well, my
friend will be delighted when I show her this story. I look
forward to you completing chapter nine. In the meantime I'll
read your other stories.
Hi Red, thanks for contacting me and sharing your experiences.
Sounds like you are a very lucky guy to have a woman who understands,
I know that must be a huge turn on to share with her! Thanks for letting her
know about my story and I hope she enjoys it. More chapters for FP coming
in the next few days.
MickD
2014 February 11
Very nice! I can't wait to read more of this encounter!!
Mother and daughter, together,hasalways been a fantasy of mine.
Thank you, MickD! I love mother/daughter stories. There is something so
sweet and hot about the combination, isn't there?
Anonymous
2014 February 11
Wow!! Can't wait to read the rest so erotic...Thanks!!!
Thanks! New chapters will be coming this week.
Bdharp2
2014 February 11
A Joy To Read ! You left me wanting more wanting to know how it all
plays out .. the internal struggle of the characters is what truly
makes your story great ! thank you for writing it !
Thanks, Bdharp2! The struggle just makes the payoff scenes that much
more enjoyable to me, glad you enjoy it!
Anonymous
2014 February 11
I'm hoping Brent gets dahlia pregnant, she and lily end up
living with him as well as orchid, orchid after catching him with
lily declares she knows he has wanted her for some time and that she
wants him, and after lily turns 11 or so he gets her pregnant too.
Having lily get pregnant from this first time with Brent would be great
in story, but irl a 9 yr old girl getting pregnant, while possible,
would have so many problems. Great story so far! I would also say
that orchid could get pregnant too, and maybe it turns out that orchid
isn't Brent's biologically, that maybe that's part of why Malory tried
to kill herself.
Thanks for the feedback! Lots of possibilities! I won't reveal what
is in store for Brent and Orchid and the others, hope you enjoy the story
as it unfolds!
Larry
2014 February 9
Love incest. Family love, sex is such a taboo thing
for no reason. To think of it is very arousing. To have these
people come together as they are is very interesting. Folks
with similar needs, wants and feelings. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks, Larry! Definitely enjoying writing FP, hope future chapters are good reads!
Terry
2014 February 8
HELLO, have just discovered your wonderful story here, and wonderful
it IS too, so well written and totally believable too, so congratulations
on that. More please too, its good that you have made known to others
the attraction of your heros wants and needs too, the pull of this and the
forbidden" aspects too, lots more mums should belike that mum and daughter.
Thanks, Terry, very glad you are enjoying the story. I definitely
don't want mothers in reality to do this with their daughters, but
the fantasy of the idea is highly arousing.
Lars
2014 February 8
Great story! Best part: "...if it is loving and warm and consensual, as much
as a young girl can consent, making love is a very positive thing that everyone
should enjoy and understand." There are varied sexual frustrations experienced by
married men that result in behavior deemed immoral and illegal by society. It takes a
strong will and desire to avoid jail and/or severe censuring by family often resulting
in separation and great mental anguish. Anyhow, I hope you continue writing further
chapters in this tale as it is both enjoyable and your command of the English language
is far superior to many of the writers on this site.
Wow, thanks, Lars. And agreed. I have the utmost respect for people who experience
strong urges that could be harmful or abusive and don't act on them. I wish more people
could let those fantasies just play out as fantasies and stop harming children.
Reality is pretty rough on people who go through scenarios like the ones I create, and I
never want anyone to be in those situations. That said, again, I agree that there are a lot
of frustrations that are made worse by the failure to acknowledge urges and deal with them
in a healthy way.
Thanks for the compliments, I just put up Chapter 3 if you haven't seen it yet, hope you enjoy!
Anonymous
2014 February 8
Wow, great story, please continue the camping saga with the mother and
daughter. I'm expecially looking forward to finding out what happens
when Lily gets involved. Thank you Chase.
Glad you like it! More chapters just posted, the story moves on!
Chef
2014 February 8
Nice. Want to read more.
Thanks, more chapters just posted!
Anonymous
2014 February 8
Excellent !
Thank you!
Anonymous
2014 February 8
I had dated this women a few times and we ended up back at her place for sex.
The place was a pigsty but I was getting pussy so I did not care. I was on the sofa when
she went down on me. Next to me was a pile of dirty clothes to be washed, including some
panties. I picked one up and noticed the crouch was stained and started to sniff it while
she was sucking my cock. I had leaned my head back smelling the panties while feeling my
nuts fill up when she raised her head off my cock and I heard her say loudly "what the
fuck you doing? Those are my 13 year old daughters panties". When I heard that I knew I
should have been scared but the exact opposite happened and I started to shoot cum harder
then I had in awhile. It flew in her face and hit her in her open eye and that really got
her cussing at me. I quickly raised my pants and left.
Oh, well a true story.
Wow, thanks for sharing your experience. Definitely don't mistake what happens in this
story or others for reality. Your experience is much more realistic. Poor woman, though,
hope you made it up to her and treated better next time!
carpenter
2014 February 7
Great new story line . I am also liking " Shipwrecked " A lot . Fine job on both .
Thank you, carpenter! I hope to have another chapter or two of Flower Petals up this weekend.
getzhard
2014 February 7
Flower Petals sounds like another wonderful story just like Shipwrecked!
Can hardly wait for the next chapter to be posted! Just like Renpet,
you are becoming one of the better authors on this site, and it
is a shame that he quit writing!
Thanks, getzhard. I couldn't agree more about Renpet, definitely one of the
very, very best.
Comments on Flower Petals: (SPOILERS)
Thank you!!
The story has been pretty good.. but this one lmao..
Orchid just talks to her dad about the possibility of wanting to have sex with another man, and blah blah blah..
Suddenly in walks a boy around her age, who is sleeping his sister for her to have sex with.
Orchid is thinking of having sex with another male, suddenly a 15 year old walks into their house who is sexually active with his sister...
Sorry that one is just lol too set up
Also... if it was a set up, what's wrong with an obvious set up in a fantasy fap story? How else would extremely unlikely events happen otherwise? Not saying what you're assuming is going to happen, but if it did... so what? I mean... All of it was an obvious set up. Bringing in Lily and her mother... Orchid... Maria... All pretty obvious set ups. Sorry if this one looks too much so to you. Not sure what you would rather I do than present foreshadowing ahead of events.
This story is open-ended. I'm not planning to draw it to a conclusion any time soon. I'm also not looking to turn it into a novel beyond what it already is.
I don't know what sort of solutions there might be. I think you're right that, right now, there are no good options (aside from using erotic stories as the outlet) but perhaps in the future something can be done which helps protect children from predators and abusers while also addressing the attractions of the adults. Maybe VR offers such a path.
In this story, specifically, remember this is fantasy and should never be confused with how reality would go. Brent (and Dahlia) are allowed to fulfill desires with Lily and Orchid as erotic fiction. The reality of such situations would be horrific and I hope you and other readers understand that I write these stories to provide a safe outlet which allows children to avoid the damaging, destructive reality of acting out these fantasies.
FYI I just published chapter 68 of FP, so I hope you enjoy it!
I am sure many men have used worn one before but do not recognize just how special it is to have such a girl's intimate thing up close.
You describe worn panties so well. Do you also have first hand experiences?
I enjoyed Flower Petals and look forward to the next chapters.
Unlike some of the arrogant commentators on Literotica, I am not going to tell you the way the story should go.
A couple of comments.
I think a 34yr old man would have a longer post orgasm recovery time and would probably be incapable of staying erect after cumming or be capable of twice in a few minutes.
However, unlike the majority of stories on ASSTR, this is well written, and contains few grammatical or spelling errors. Well done!
Re: CAPTCHA: Unfortunately, this is out of my hands. ASSTR handles that aspect (I cannot control the CAPTCHA and whether/how it appears), and the CAPTCHA isn't working in several browsers for all authors on the site.
Re: multiple orgasms: While I agree that many men would indeed take longer periods of recover I have known several who were even older than Brent who did/do not and who are quite capable of maintaining erection even after ejaculation. It is a fantasy, after all, so I hope this aspect isn't marring the story for you. Thanks again for the compliments!
Hope you write more chapters, really want to see how you resolve the extended family issues not to mention the anticipation of all those lactating tits!!! Big Fan, Redfreak
I'll definitely have more chapters for FP in the future, I really enjoy writing about the characters and the challenges they face!
Thank you for sharing your talents and of course I so LOVE this genre of fiction!
Recent updates have brought me back to "Flower Petals" from chapter 1. It's as good on my 3rd time as the first two times I read it! :)
I also enjoyed "I Never Saw Her Again". "Helen" and "The Shitting Fields" and ... heck, all of them. Now, granted, some of those ARE way out there encounters, but then again, that's what they should be in that story line. Heck, if things like that happened often or every day, one WOULD see her again. :P
Oh hell! Love all your works! Going to start "Diary Of A Loose Girl" when I'm done with "Petals" for the 3rd time. Believe it or not, haven't read that one yet (according to my browser and feeble memory).
In closing, again, THANK YOU for sharing and giving: your time, your vision, your writing. 1M words and counting! You have given us much! Thank You!
I do actually think that having "Joe Every Man" be able to see himself in the plot is key to many of the stories, certainly Flower Petals. That's why there is often a decided lack of description of the narrator's looks, including penis size and facial hair. It lets the reader see through the eyes whatever they want about the first-person giving the view.
I hope you continue to enjoy my writing!
Also, I feel there is a bit of a hole in your plot involving Orchid's mother and Brent's exwife. What happened to her? From your initial chapters it seems unlikely that Brent's ex would just abandon Orchid to Brent. Given her almost bipolar description, I would have thought that she would be a pernicious thorn in Brent's and Orchid's side. Is she in an insane asylum, one that doesn't allow outside contact? What's up with her?
As far as using 'mewled'... I checked the master document. The words 'mewled' and 'mewling' are in there a grand total of 21 times in over 170,000 words. Hardly seems like 'overuse'. The term isn't one that I think has a great deal of 'other descriptors' which would convey the same thing. I use that word on purpose, even knowing it can have sad connotations by common definitions. But I think it fits exactly the sound I wish conveyed, and in context, the reader hopefully understands it is an imitative sound of contentment rather than a feeble cry. Somewhere between a whimper and a purr, perhaps. Would you prefer I use 'whimper'? That conveys a very different sense to me. 'Bleat'? No way. 'Cry'? No way. I use 'purr' sometimes to convey a similar sound and context. Sorry that it is a distraction, but 21 times across 52 chapters hardly seems excessive to me.
As for Malory, her part of the story has been intentionally put aside for a while. I cannot focus on every detail in the world, and though Malory played an important role early on, the focus for the story is on Orchid and Brent. I had to let go some of the plot ideas I had around Malory in order to move things forward. There are some parallel events going on that cause Malory's absense from the tale, but I won't get into them here. I get that it feels like a 'hole.' I don't want the reader to overly concern him/herself with her part except as necessary in the early chapters. While I won't reveal the details, Malory has not been forgotten and her part in the story may again surface.
When will one of the little ones get pregnant?
There is tendency for some repetition during the sex between the adults Brent and Dahlia, but this did not seriously interfere with the story. The slow development between Brent and the girls is powerful stuff for some of your readers, certainly mine.
However, I certainly hope that you continue more chapters than just 17. You most certainly have room for Lily and Orchid, Brent and Orchid, and then including Brent with one then both of the younger girls, and then include Dahlia etc. etc.
There are many more chapters available, so I hope in the weeks since you wrote me, you found them and enjoyed them as well. The series has 52 chapters now.
The same is true with the pregnancy idea. Again, Orchid is on birth control, and we already have two pregnant women now in the cast. She's thirteen and I cannot see Brent being alright with impregnating his young teen daughter.
P.S. What do we have to do Chase, to get you off that Island and back to Flower Petals? ;-)
Re: new chapters, soon! I had a lot of Shipwrecked that I wanted to get written, getting to the end of that loop now, so I'll be back on other series soon.
I just re-read the first few chapters of Shipwrecked, and even on a second pass, it holds up so well. It really draws me in. And the realism that you insert: the grappling with the world outside of these relationships and how the relationships are impacted by the world around them -- it blows me away and inspires me.
Also, the way you balance the myriad connections between your characters, is really skillful. You keep everyone active in the story and keep the romance and sex balanced as well.
I'm in awe of your work. Not only have I enjoyed reading your stories and fapping to them, but I have learned a lot from you as a writer as well.
Loving the story so far, and watching things develop and gradually get kinkier.
One random thing I've been thinking of, is that with the new house being built... wouldn't it cause too much isolation for the characters? Especially the girls, something about mingling with peers their own age and stuff.
On a different note: Things seem to have been going rather smoothly for our protagonist... So yeah, I'm curious to see how long that lasts. Because I've a feeling it won't.
Either way, I'm looking forward to more. Hope you're doing okay.
Good thoughts on the isolation, definitely something I've thought about and will explore later in the series. Not sure when I'll get to the next FP chapter, but there is more on the way for sure.
I don't normally comment but this story just moved me to action.
If you don't write for a living you should.
I know everyone wants the 'payoff scene' but I hope what you like about my stories is that nothing is forced. The characters will decide when each next step happens, not me ;)
It was possibly the hardest chapter to write in any of my series so far.
I needed to get 'over the hump' on the single most significant plot point in the whole story, and I really wanted to get it right. I sat on it a day or so and reread it, looking to see if it still felt like the conflict and challenges were real enough.
Obviously, Orchid's reaction lays the basis for what follows, and given that I'd gone 21 chapters (now 22) without yet producing the 'payoff' scene between father and daughter, teasing out the relationship, I tried hard to keep this chapter in the same realm of plausibility as the slow build to date and move it across a really important decision point for both of them without taking shortcuts (well, no more than any romantic incest fab stories do, anyway).
it keeps me wanting to read more
unusually good
All my stories can be found on my Home page.
Jeep up the good work!
Reality is pretty rough on people who go through scenarios like the ones I create, and I never want anyone to be in those situations. That said, again, I agree that there are a lot of frustrations that are made worse by the failure to acknowledge urges and deal with them in a healthy way.
Thanks for the compliments, I just put up Chapter 3 if you haven't seen it yet, hope you enjoy!
Oh, well a true story.